AS#2: some minor bits of English

["Paul V Ford-Hutchinson" <paulfordh@xxxxxxxxxx>]

A few nits

in as2-10 ...

- page 5 (seems to be page 5 in -11 pre-draft too)

"    Many of the specifications referenced by [MIME-TYPES] were
    designed for SMTP transports. Implementors are advised to make
    appropriate adjustments for HTTP transport as indicated in
    section 4 of this document."

'this document' is ambiguous - I went looking in the draft and not the reference.

- section 2.4 last few lines (seems to be section 2.3 in the -11 pre-draft)

"making use of the HTTPS scheme to obtain security privacy."

'security privacy' is not English

- bottom of page 14 (middle of page 15 in -11 pre-draft)

"    Otherwise the automated acknowledgement semantics are left open
    to further semantic specification by specific electronic commerce"

semantic overload ?


-section 3.2.4 (both docs)

As https is recommended - should there not be some discussion of the TLS multi-hosting problem (X.509 DN in cert vs HOST parm in HTTP)

Cheers,
Paul


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