Additional issues with draft-ietf-fax-service-v2-04.txt

[ned.freed@xxxxxxxxxxx]

I just reviewed the updated (-04) version of this document and it addresses the
issues I previously raised. Unfortunately, the changes themselves have raised a
couple of additional issues:

(1) This document now begins with a long summary, not a short abstract. The
    RFC Editor has started pushing back on documents that don't begin with
    a short abstract. I therefore suggest changing it to read:

Abstract

   This specification provides for "simple mode" carriage of facsimile
   data using Internet mail.  Extensions to this document will follow.
   The current specification employs standard protocols and file formats
   such as TCP/IP, Internet mail protocols [1, 2, 3], MIME [4, 10, 11],
   and TIFF for Facsimile [5, 12, 14].  It can send images not only to
   other Internet-aware facsimile devices but also to Internet-native
   systems, such as PCs with common email readers which can handle MIME
   mail and TIFF for Facsimile data.  The specification facilitates
   communication among existing facsimile devices, Internet mail agents,
   and the gateways which connect them.

   This document is a revision of RFC 2305. There have been no
   technical changes.

    The paragraphs on intellectual property claims and keyword terminology
    should each be moved to separate subsections after section 1, "Scope".
    Renaming section 1, "Scope" to "Introduction" would also be a good idea.

(2) The formatting of appendix parts 4 and 7 are busted and need to be fixed.
    Also "nomartive" should be "normative".

That's it!

				Ned